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-'''Shadya''' is an exotic bellydancer for hire at the [[Ram's Horn]] in [[Cyrene]]. Clad only in chains that merrily jingle with her faster movements and brightly coloured veils that hide her shapely form, the only parts of her body revealed are her dark, almond shaped eyes, the lower portion of her shapely legs and her bare feet.
+'''Shadya, a bellydancer''', works at the [[Ram's Horn]] Bar in [[Cyrene]]. Clad only in chains that merrily jingle to her faster movements and brightly coloured veils that hide her shapely form, Shadya keeps her body largely obscured from view; only her dark, almond-shaped eyes, lower legs, and bare feet are visible.
-For the right gold, she will perform an erotic strip-tease for either male or female customers in a room filled with colourful pillows that act as seating and the pungent aroma of clove from a large, brass incense burner.
+For the right price, she will perform her erotic dance for male and female customers alike from her smoky room filled with colourful seat-pillows. A large, brass incense burner also serves to set the right mood by emitting the pungent aroma of cloves through the chamber.
+In the year 363 AF, Shadya was targeted by members of the organized [[Jaguars]] crime ring in their plot to extort gold from the [[:Category:City-states|cities]] of [[Sapience]].
-In the year 363, Shadya was targeted by thugs from the [[Jaguars]] crime ring in a plot to extort gold from citizens and denizens alike, as organized crime syndicates were revealed all across [[Sapience]].
 [[Category:Cyrene Denizens]]