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Yeah. It does sound like something from a cheesey holiday brochure. Could someone re-work it, please? --[[User:Tasshya|Tasshya]] 00:25, 17 December 2006 (GMT) | Yeah. It does sound like something from a cheesey holiday brochure. Could someone re-work it, please? --[[User:Tasshya|Tasshya]] 00:25, 17 December 2006 (GMT) | ||
I kinda find the tone and presentation nice, and it fits with the vibe of the Pyramid. Xaviere's writing style in the matter presented the information in a rather interesting way without losing her own voice. Shouldn't an emphasis be on what isn't done yet rather than conforming things that have already been done? We have so many things that haven't been written yet, why hack at things that might sound cheesy but are set up already? Then again I'm just throwing my two cents in while I wait for an old fart to show up I can badger about what I'm working on. 08: | I kinda find the tone and presentation nice, and it fits with the vibe of the Pyramid. Xaviere's writing style in the matter presented the information in a rather interesting way without losing her own voice. Shouldn't an emphasis be on what isn't done yet rather than conforming things that have already been done? We have so many things that haven't been written yet, why hack at things that might sound cheesy but are set up already? Then again I'm just throwing my two cents in while I wait for an old fart to show up I can badger about what I'm working on. [[User:Corvax|Corvax]] 08:50, 17 December 2006 (GMT) | ||
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Information, or Advertisement?
This article reads like an ad. Should a more neutral tone be adopted? Haydre 18:14, 16 December 2006 (GMT)
Yeah. It does sound like something from a cheesey holiday brochure. Could someone re-work it, please? --Tasshya 00:25, 17 December 2006 (GMT)
I kinda find the tone and presentation nice, and it fits with the vibe of the Pyramid. Xaviere's writing style in the matter presented the information in a rather interesting way without losing her own voice. Shouldn't an emphasis be on what isn't done yet rather than conforming things that have already been done? We have so many things that haven't been written yet, why hack at things that might sound cheesy but are set up already? Then again I'm just throwing my two cents in while I wait for an old fart to show up I can badger about what I'm working on. Corvax 08:50, 17 December 2006 (GMT)