Talk:Erisian Pyramid

Information, or Advertisement?

This article reads like an ad. Should a more neutral tone be adopted? Haydre 18:14, 16 December 2006 (GMT)

Yeah. It does sound like something from a cheesey holiday brochure. Could someone re-work it, please? --Tasshya 00:25, 17 December 2006 (GMT)

I kinda find the tone and presentation nice, and it fits with the vibe of the Pyramid. Xaviere's writing style in the matter presented the information in a rather interesting way without losing her own voice. Shouldn't an emphasis be on what isn't done yet rather than conforming things that have already been done? We have so many things that haven't been written yet, why hack at things that might sound cheesy but are set up already? Then again I'm just throwing my two cents in while I wait for an old fart to show up I can badger about what I'm working on. Corvax 08:50, 17 December 2006 (GMT)

As the original author, I understand that any comment I make on my own writing may distemper some aspect of bias. However, I feel that changing the tone would lose the relative atmosphere that is garnered from such a place as the Erisian Pyramid, and detract from the fact that it truly is a random place. I disagree that it is an advertisement, but there is a distinct emphasis on the aspect of Chaos and relation to Eris, as well as a distinct rundown of locations within and peoples inside. I do agree that my writing style is certainly unique, however, this is one of the earliest articles in the Wiki, and although it may seem that I was spurious in choosing the manner in which I depicted it, I assure you that I studied the other articles at the time in detail to find a platform to work from. I believe the article's content is indeed objective and informative, but not in the same standard fashion of writing as perhaps other articles. However, this article is for free-editing, and I am willing to change what I have written to suit a stated, specified norm, but really, I'd prefer if some semblance of the tone was still tangible in some manner.

I apologise for the fact that my writing sounds like something from a cheesy holiday brochure. Having never written for one perhaps I should focus my attentions on getting a job there, rather than using this new-found talent to enter the Bardic or such forums. Oh well. Xaviere 15.27:, 18 December 2006 (GMT)

Okay, that last comment was a bit ratty, I apologise for that... share a biscuit? Xaviere 16.50:, 18 December 2006 (GMT)

Seed of Chaos

The entire room that the Seed of Chaos used to be in is no longer attached to the Golden Dais of Creation. There was also a room with a denizen in it that gave visual tours (I can't remember her name), the room had no exits. Within the Golden Apple Corps or something. That's probably gone now too. --Kunama 13:43, 21 April 2008 (GMT)

Yes, the Corps of the Golden Apple article is in the "edit needed" category now (and the link to that article from the Golden Dais of Creation was removed) for that reason. And do you mean Hagbard Celine? I've never met him, though I've looked. He was reached from the Corps? --Krypton 14:47, 21 April 2008 (GMT)

--Imyrr 05:26, 19 January 2009 (UTC) Updated! Should be good.